Ok story with 1 glaring problem

The sister of the protagonist is a Mary Sue and degrades everything the ppl around her are doing and it also devalues her own suffering.
Everybody in this story has to work to get ahead, she just always happens to get ahead without doing anything for it.
And then there's the fact that nobody points that out to her, everybody acts as if she deserved all those gifts.

For explanation: Both protagonists had to work hard to be respected and competent, one is a very old "wolfen" with many years of pratice and training, the other is a genetically modified, highly trained fighter and assassin with years of experience, the sister is a girl that likes to party, stay in school and live of someone elses money instead of getting a job. Doesn't anyone see the problem when she just gets handed so many special powers and all she had to do for it was to suffer a few days, many ppl would go through something like that willingly if they came out the other end as some kind of super Werwolf.

This story would've worked so much better if the sister had been forced into the pack and they had to find a way to protect her from abuse until she herself built up the strength to gain rank without some mysterious, never seen instant super powers. As it is now it taints the whole story and takes away from any achievement the protagonists make, because in the next scene the story will say "yea, they did great, but the super sister could've done it better without breaking a sweat."

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